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A Sunday Tease…

I believe I owe you all an excerpt from my work-in-progress, Dagger of the Sun (or DotS as I affectionate like to call it).

Without further delay…here it is:

The night air was causing gooseflesh to spread over her arms and legs and the flimsy pale blue tunic wasn’t doing much to protect the rest of her either. Delphyne cursed whatever gods had brought the prince back from the barracks tonight of all nights. She judged the distance from her vantage point to the throne room’s entrance to be less than a minute, but the trick would be crossing the crowded floor without being stopped by someone interesting in hearing about a hunter’s tale.

Or I could jump from the balcony.

It honestly didn’t look that high. If she bent her knees on the landing, she would be fine. She leaned over the railing, letting her fingers encircle the cool stone.

“I would advise against it.”

Delphyne swivelled, heart nearly popping out of her chest. “Don’t scare me…I thought you were —”

Apollo raised an eyebrow.

“Nevermind,” Delphyne amended. “Where have you been?”

She had lost track of Apollo seconds after the feast had started. Apollo had noticed a poet friend of his in the crowd and wandered off. After that, it had been difficult to catch sight of him for more than a minute as he flitted around the room like a butterfly.

“Making the rounds,” Apollo said. “But I’m more interested in knowing why you’re standing here peeping at the statues?”

In the moonlight, the statues in the garden behind her looked even more lewd. Not to mention the occasional moans that drifted up from the shadowed maze.

“I was…” She paused. How could she phrase her words so that she didn’t sound like either a coward or a pervert? “I was getting some fresh air.” She finished rather lamely.

“It has gotten rather stuffy.” A pause. “More so now that the prince has arrived.”

Damn.

“You know?”

“Asclepius told me.” Apollo looked at her, a small smile forming on his lips. “Did the prince really ask you to marry him…by telling you that you’d be a good breeder?”

Delphyne gave him a look that implied she would not be discussing this at length.

“And did you really punch him in response?”

Clearly, her look got lost in translation. “I didn’t have my sword with me, so punching him was my only recourse.”

Since this is a work in progress, I am very open to criticism and feedback…any thing that will help me improve. So please, please, leave a comment or suggestion below.

Now it’s back to the writing board!

Rika Ashton (aka Book Hermit)

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Site Updates and Book Talk

We finally got the contact form up and running a few days ago, so if you have feedback/questions, etc you would like to submit, you are now more than welcome to do so. Mostly, I have thank Chaos for getting this fixed. This is why I pay you the not-so-big-bucks, dude! 😛

We’ve also got the review policy up – although, we might make some minor changes in the future to cover any unforseeable loopholes, etc.

And last but not least, we’ve decided to add a consolidated page for all Dagger of the Sun info. This pretty much includes all excerpts/teasers from the new version, maps, character interviews, and character profiles. We’ll continue posting them through the regular blog as well, but we’ll have a separate page as an online book bible so you can easily access all relevant posts. 😀

Basically, we decided to do this because DOTS is turning out to be a very lengthy book, so keeping track of details is a HUGE issue as the story moves forward. I’m hoping – with Chaos’ help – that the online book bible will help keep me sane.

But we’ll post link to the page as soon as we have it up and running.

Before I sign off, I want to thank the amazing Kaleigha over at Wicked Scribes for sending me a copy of J. R. Ward’s The King – as my little bro would say I “junkied” this book like no one’s business and finished all 500+ pages in a day and a half. It was amazing! Also, for some reason, this book made me want to reread Lover Avenged – Rehvenge and Ehlena’s story – and I’m halfway through that as well. Love, love, love this couple! But I wish Ehlena got more scenes in other novels – she’s one of my favourite characters but she forgotten in the succeeding novels. (On the other hand, Rehv never seems to stop showing up – not that I mind – but I really wish he’d bring his mated with him more often. *sigh*)

What books are you all reading (or rereading) and loving? 

Rika Ashton

(aka The Book Worm)


Connecting the DOTS

As most of you might already know DOTS (aka Dagger of the Sun) is undergoing some changes. The more time I spend in my fictionalized version of Ancient Greece, the more the world expands – in particular, the Underworld. The Underworld in DOTS is actually a world within a world, and in my version it existed long before Hades claimed it for the dead. And unlike the surface world of mortal Greece, which with the exception of supernatural elements, is mostly true to history – the Underworld is almost 99% a fictionalized landscape. I’m having loads of fun naming places and coming up with groups of people who inhabit the different landscapes of the Underworld.

Best of all, I actually get to stretch my creative muscles a bit and create a map of the Underworld. I actually get to draw! (Or at least I like to call all the chicken scratch I’m throwing on paper “drawing.”)

Of course, not all of the terrain with be revealed in the first book, so I don’t get to draw a complete map…otherwise that would be some major spoilage for book two, but what I do get to include is very detailed.

But I have to say: PLEASE, DON’T EXPECT TOO MUCH from this map – I am NOT an artist and therefore, it’s going to be a very amateurish attempt at drawing a map.

However, despite the fact that it will be a very embarrassing attempt, I will still swallow my pride and share on the blog.

And for those of you still not deterred and unafraid of having your eyes bleed, I do have a very bad rough draft.

To make up for my bad mapping skills, I’ll share a teaser from DOTS. This is a scene that happens way later in the novel, and features Bae and Kael. The gentlemen are discussing Bae’s rigorous training schedule for Delphyne.

Ben Hill, my inspiration for Bae.

“Do you think I’m being too hard on her?” Bae asked.

Kael thought about the still-healing cut that he had seen running down the length of Delphyne’s right arm. The fabric of the bandage she’d hastily wrapped around the wound had been soaked through. He had been ready to drive his fist though Bae’s face last night, but had been halted by the words Delphyne had whispered to him in the flickering candlelight of their bedchamber.

“I’m still alive, aren’t I?” She had shrugged, not without flinching. “And as incredible as this may seem at the moment, I do plan to stay that way.”

“I think it’s good for her,” Bae continued, dunking his hands into a basin full of water. He splashed a handful of the water on his face, using the clear liquid to rub away the dirt and sweat of the day’s training session. “But I figured if you’re itching to slit my throat, you might as well get it over with so we can both move on.”

A river of fire. That’s how Delphyne’s wound had looked the night before. A vermilion streak over sun-kissed skin. This morning it had been the finest white line. It was healing. Fast.

So much faster than before.

“No,” said Kael. “I don’t want to slit your throat for hurting my wife.”

Bae looked at him in surprise. 

“I want you to keep training her…until she’s strong enough to slit your throat on her own.”

And there you have it! I had to cut out some parts from the scene – because some things that Kael says are spoilers – but I felt relatively safe uploading this.

Hopefully you enjoyed the little snippet, and now I have to get back to writing! 😀

Rika Ashton

(aka The Mapmaker)


Of Heroes and Villains

Writing some new scenes into Dagger of the Sun and while none of my characters can be clearly defined as heroes or villains, some are truly bad until they have a moment (albeit small) of redemption. And, although Delphyne, Kael and Apollo are the main characters, none of them are selfless enough to be anyone’s hero – at least not for very long.

But the character flaws are fun to play with and their corruption makes the political games more interesting throughout the novel – especially when the Warlords come into play. (These were some of my favourite scenes to write, and I can’t till I have a rewritten snippet to share on the blog.)

I’m currently playing around with a action sequence starring Delphyne, Apollo and Lykos – a professional killer employed by Kael and sent for item retrieval. It’s a key scene in the novel, so I’m trying really, really hard to get it right. Luckily, the music gods were listening to my prayers and sent me a neat piece of inspiration for the scene – Tegan and Sara’s “I’m Not Your Hero:”

The lyrics of the song are a perfect fit for Delphyne’s personality and inner feelings. I love finding music that I can write to…even better if it’s music that inspires me to write. 😀

What are some of your favourite pieces of writing music?

Rika Ashton

(aka The Anti-Hero Writer)


A Special ‘Thank You’ and a Teaser

I’m going to try and keep this post short…mostly because I have to get back to writing, but I thought it might be time for a new teaser from Dagger of the Sun. (And this one will be slightly longer than one line, I promise!)

But first I need to give a special shout out to my critique partners, June Hur and Priscilla Shay, for keeping me motivated through the new draft. I have really high expectations for this novel, but sometimes they don’t always translate well on paper. Yet the advice these ladies have given me makes me want to keep writing…even when I feel like tearing my hair out because none of my characters will do what I want.

It seems silly to say this, because aren’t they just characters? But I dare you to write a novel featuring both Apollo (aka Arrogant Sun God) and Delphyne (aka Madame Huntress Extraordinaire) and see how far you get before you want to throw your computer out the window.

The most surprising part is that Kael, my anti-hero, is the only one doing what he’s told…I think he just really wants me to get this novel published so he can share his magnificence with the world. 😉

And he’s not the only one. I also want to get this novel out there as soon as possible so that I can start on the next one. I even have a title: Throne of the Sun…and yes, the acronym is TOTS because I am awesome. But the acronym for the third novel won’t be as fun – Empire of the Sun…EOTS just doesn’t have the same ring to it.

Of course, these are just working titles and might change, but for now I like them and I want to get on with these stories…

But I just remember my promise to keep this post short, so no more ranting today.

If anyone has actually read this far, it’s only because they finally want me to get to the teaser, so here it is:

“Isadora talks to me,” Asclepius had said a moment later, mentioning the Spartan war widow who owned

The late Andy Whitfield, my inspiration for Asclepius.

The late Andy Whitfield, my inspiration for Asclepius.

one of the farms near their home.

“Isadora also talks to her plants.”

But he’d shrugged. “She said it helps them grow.”

Delphyne had slanted her head and narrowed her gaze at him. Then she’d smiled and said, “You like her.”

Although he had reminded himself that grown men didn’t blush, he’d felt heat creeping into his cheeks. “No, I don’t,” he remembered saying.

Delphyne had given him that look – the one with a slow smile and narrow-eyed determination. It was the look she got whenever her mind was running through a series of schemes that were likely to spell trouble for him. He had been intimately acquainted with that look since Delphyne had been ten summers old and had begun smiling again. 

The above teaser, completely unedited, is from chapter four in DOTS…the one chapter that was giving me the most trouble, but I’m done with the new draft and I’ll be sending the chapter to my critique partners soon.

Rika Ashton

(aka The Very Grateful)


Blog Confessions: My Ben-Addiction

For the greater part of last night, when I should have been working on my personal brand of agony which I call Dagger of the Sun, I found myself wandering the endless channels of the Internet looking at Benedict Cumberbatch pictures and memes.

Okay, so it’s no secret that I adore Benedict Cumberbatch (BBC Sherlock, Star Trek 2), but the man’s mesmerizing blue eyes are now beginning to interfere with my work. Then after many late night phone calls and tearful confessions, my cousin offered to come to my house and show me a picture of my dear Benedict in drag…

…Only, it didn’t work, because the man’s sense of humour and ability to take himself not too seriously is just one of the things that have made me go fangirl crazy!

That and the fact that my cousin – who was laughing her butt off when she saw this picture – doesn’t seem to understand that there is no unattractive picture of Benedict…such a feat is humanly impossible.

So despite that fact that she tried really hard, my cousin was no match for the endless pictures of Benedict available on the Internet. Here are some of my personal favourites:

1. This one says: intense, serious, but with an underlying sensitivity.

 2. This one says “I am good at being bad.” (But when I saw it, I said, “Holy, Mother of God!”)

3. And “Oh my, are his legs ever so long?”)

4. And finally, “Look into my eyes…”

Clearly, I have to find a way to write him into DOTS and then have him cast for the movie and then sneak on set so we can “chat.”

Rika Ashton

(aka “This blog post could also have been titled ‘The Shameless Cutting and Pasting of Benedict Cumberbatch Pictures’ but we opted for something classier.”)


A Lesson in Ancient Greek Beauty

Ancient Greek Beauty

So I was writing the new chapters for Dagger of the Sun (DOTS) and it got me thinking about armpit hair.

Yeah, I know…

Gross! 

But it got me thinking about how people in ancient times may have gotten rid of unwanted hair – I know laser treatments weren’t available yet. (No matter what Lynsay Sands would have me believe in her Argeneau series! There is no such thing as an evolved Atlantean civilization in DOTS, so I couldn’t just open up an Ideal Image laser salon on a random Greek street corner.)

So I did what any good scholar would do? I Googled it.

And I found an interesting article about the history of hair removal the NoNo website of all places. But I figured if anyone was going to know there stuff, it would be the experts. Here’s a snippet of what I found:

Ancient Egyptians removed unwanted hair with flint or bronze razors – they even invented a technique similar to waxing called sugaring, which used a sticky paste and a piece of cloth to yank the hair out at the root! Hair removal was very important to the Ancient Egyptians for cultural or perhaps even religious reasons. In Ancient Egypt, both men and women shaved their heads and wore wigs instead of their natural hair. They took it so seriously so long ago, that some Egyptian bronze and flint razors have been dated to over 3000 years ago, and sugaring is thought to date back as far as 3000-4000 BC!

Around that time people also developed the first depilatory creams, which chemically dissolve the hair above the skin. Other depilatories that date from that time dissolved hair above the skin as they still do today, but without the chemical and anatomical knowledge we have. This meant that early depilatories (5000-7000 years ago) were very irritating to the skin, and were probably quite painful. Simpler depilatories included quicklime, arsenic, and starch and more complex versions later on included resin, pitch, animal fats, and even bat’s blood!

In Ancient Greece, it was simply barbaric to have body hair, and people took great pains to remove any hair that would show them to be anything less than civilized. Any beards or unshaven areas besides the head would indicate that you were a lower class or even a slave – an appearance that was avoided if at all possible.

The information was surprisingly useful when it came to crafting my characters – I was also surprised to learn that I wouldn’t really have to change anything about their appearance. (I must have been channeling some Ancient Greek being when I wrote the character descriptions.)

After I found information on that, I started thing about teeth – because, really, what else what there to think about? And, once again, I turned to the Google gods for help. As generous as ever, they answered my prayers and I found a neat article about Ancient Greek oral hygiene:

How do we clean the teeth?  The simplest answer is with the finger.  Either the finger was wrapped with a cotton cloth, and then rubbed over the teeth to clean them, or the finger was dipped in some powdered substance with special properties to clean the teeth.  These tooth powders were the forerunners of our modern toothpaste.  

Or, the branch of a tree whose fragrant essential oils have antiseptic and other therapeutic properties for the teeth and gums could be chewed.  The chewed end would then come to resemble a brush of sorts, whose loose, frayed fibers could be brushed over the teeth to clean them.  

One tree native to Greece and much used by the ancient Greeks that fits these requirements rather nicely is the Laurel (Laurus nobilis), which the Greeks call Daphne.  Its essential oils are antiseptic, and also stimulate blood circulation to the gums, promoting their health and regeneration.  After chewing on the branch, or the leaves, your mouth is cleaned, and left with a fresh, clean scent.

Sometimes fresh, fragrant green herbs were chewed after a meal to cleanse the teeth and mouth and freshen the breath.  These fresh herbs included those of Fennel, Parsleyand Lovage.  Even today, fresh Parsley is often chewed to remove the odor of Garlic.  The seeds of these and other plants, such as the Cardamom, were also chewed to cleanse the mouth and freshen the breath. 

Finally, I also looked up some beauty tips – because it was something I thought my character Delphyne would appreciate after what I put her through in the first few chapters. I found one article in particular enlightening:

Women would start their routine with a bath, before applying a variety of oils and perfume to their skin. Honey and olive oil were used heavily, on their body, hair and in cosmetics for their moisturizing properties. Ancient Greek women wore their hair long and had a preference for it to be golden. This was achieved by using a vinegar solution that bleached the hair in the sun, or a yellow flower dye. Soap, pomades and wax were also used to give the hair shine. To enhance the texture of the hair, Hellenistic women often curled their hair and held it in place with combs. They used different embellishments and veils also. Gold and semi-precious stones were used as were diadems and flowers. A diadem was an ornamental headband primarily worn by the upper classes and royalty, if adorned with gems and gold. Scents were used in the hair and were made my boiling flowers, herbs and spices and mixed with olive oil. In the classical period, women only cut their hair during periods of mourning. Hair played a role as a social communicator and also emphasized class differentiation, as only slaves wore their hair short. 

The last article refers specifically to female beauty routines, but I’m sure that men had some as well. Unfortunately, those articles are harder to find. 😦

But overall, I found all the articles I extremely helpful, and I hope you get a chance to give them a read through in their entirety. (I’ve linked to all of them in the post.)

Rika Ashton

(aka The Researcher)


It’s All Greek to Me!

I’ve been rewriting my retelling of Greco-Roman mythology, Dagger of the Sun (DOTS), for the last few days – and, on the rare occasion, I still procrastinate. (I’m still working on how to cure this fatal weakness – when I think of all the time I waste, I really want to slap myself senseless, but the cycle just starts again.)

Anyway, back to the point at hand. On those occasions when I procrastinate, I often find myself on YouTube watching random videos. But last night, I watched a few film trailers that actually pushed me back towards my draft and inspired me to write. Score!

The first of these trailers was for the upcoming film, The Legend of Hercules – starring Kellan Lutz and Gaia Weiss. (I know, her name is Gaia – had a nerd moment when I read that because, really, how appropriate is that?!)

The second trailer was for the action-packed film, 300: Rise of an Empire. I hope that Eva Green and Lena Headey actually do get to duke it out (with armies) as the trailer suggests:

Finally, I saw the trailer for Pompeii. This one didn’t make a whole lot of sense to me – don’t know what all the fighting is about when everyone should just be trying to evacuate the city…hello, volcano’s about to blow. But I’ll probably end up watching it anyway – it’s usually the unexpected films that turn out to be good. (And it really doesn’t hurt that Kit Harrington is starring in this one!)

So which of these films are you most excited for?

Rika Ashton

(aka The Film Buff)


Life at the Drawing Board and a Teaser from DOTS

It’s back to writing and revamping Dagger of the Sun (DOTS) – yes, I also feel like I do this A LOT!

I felt like I had to revamp my story before submissions for a few very important reasons:

1. Delphyne had no real motive to be involved in any of the action. Don’t get me wrong, I tried to give her a motive. (i.e: She’s Apollo’s friend so she cares, dammit!) But in the end, this wasn’t enough – in Booklandia, friendship can only take a character so far.

2. I HATED the ending. So for obvious reasons this had to change. 

3. I jumped into the action too fast. Great for plot development, not so great for character development – hence, I needed to find the book’s Zen balance. 

4. My cousin – aka Book Critique #1 – told me the first chapter was too bloody, so if someone was reading it and eating at the same time…well, you get the picture. 

5. My other cousin – aka Self-Proclaimed Book Critique #2 – told me the title was too funky. (But I’m not changing this…NOT again. Besides it’s a working title and I don’t have time to agonize over it yet.)

So what’s up with the new DOTS?

Well, in addition to the above changes, I also have to move around all the chapter so they would fit with the new life story I gave Delphyne. (I ended up completely overhauling her life, but I’m satisfied with the new story – it feels right.) Apollo gets a later introduction, but his sons arrive earlier. Delphyne also has a new mentor. Some minor changes included switching the spelling of Lord Kaelus’ name from “Kale” to “Kael.”

I also upgraded some of the armour and weapons in the book. (I was inspired by Kellan Lutz’s upcoming film, The Legend of Hercules.)

Finally, after much agony and torment, I decided on a new first line for the novel – which is actually today’s teaser:

Delphyne woke to the metallic taste of blood in her mouth and the suffocating scent of death. 

So are you tempted to read more?

And now it’s back to the drawing board – although, I don’t really get to draw anything. *sigh*

Rika Ashton

(aka The “Writer”)


Update from the Land of No Tech

Hi folks,

Just a quick update to let you know that I haven’t been abducted by pirates or run off to an alternate dimension. (Trust me, that would have been a more exciting alternative.)

The reason that I haven’t been able to blog for a while is because the techno people at Future Shop have decided to unjustly punish me and take away my laptop for three weeks. Okay, so I was the one to drop off my laptop, but if I had known that a routine cleanup was going to equate three weeks of misery, I never would have done it!

I tried to blog from my iPod, but formatting colour and pictures I may posts are HUGE sources of frustration. (Besides, while typing this post, I accidentally deleted it TWICE…not fun, trust me!)

But, despite the frustration, I can’t seem to stay away from Bloglandia. My narcissistic nature means that I need to share my second-to-second life with the world. And the fact that I’m currently scarfing down a ham-and-cheese sandwich is clearly significant for the world to know. 🙂

But, hopefully, when I get my laptop back in a week and a half, I’ll be able to get back to more interesting posts. Till then, I’ll continue to write and edit my DOTS scenes in my little black book.

-Rika Ashton

(aka The Girl Who Can’t Even Italicize Her Name on the iPod)